Making a new joke

DaveC426913

DaveC426913

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OK, many other joke threads are in A&C, so I'll put this here for now.

This is about the creative process involved in making a new joke.

I've got a nugget, and I'm seeing how I can word-smith it to make it witty.


So, my first kick at the can:

A hungry guy is waiting in the car outside the grocery store for his wife.
She comes out and gets in the car with bags of groceries, and he hears her muttering "chow-chow-chow-chow."
He smiles at her and says "That makes me very happy!"
She hauls off and pounds him one in the arm.
He says "Ouch! What was that for?"
She says "Now you know how it feels, you jerk!"
"What? I'm hungry. You were saying chowchowchowchow!"
"You nitwit. I banged my arm on the door. I was saying ouchouchouchouch!"
 
Suggestion: The last line is the guy's, saying ouchouchouchouch. No explanation. Set it up.
 
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iceaura said:
Suggestion: The last line is the guy's, saying ouchouchouchouch. No explanation.
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OK. Brevity is always better.

Which of the final few lines would you eliminate though?
The joke needs to set up the punchline for why she's saying ouch in the first place.

Maybe describe her rubbing her shoulder as she says chowchowechowchow.
 
A hungry guy is waiting in the car outside the grocery store for his wife.
She comes out and while getting into the car with bags of groceries, she bangs her arm on the door.
As she rubs her arm, he hears her muttering "chow-chow-chow-chow."
He smiles at her and says "Mm. I'm hungry! That makes me very happy!"
She says "You're a jerk!"
She hauls off and pounds him one in the arm.
"ouchouchouchouch!"
 
DaveC426913 said:
A hungry guy is waiting in the car outside the grocery store for his wife.
She comes out and while getting into the car with bags of groceries, she bangs her arm on the door.
As she rubs her arm, he hears her muttering "chow-chow-chow-chow."
He smiles at her and says "Mm. I'm hungry! That makes me very happy!"
She says "You're a jerk!"
She hauls off and pounds him one in the arm.
"ouchouchouchouch!"
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A man and a woman walk into a restaurant. She mutters, "Chowchowchow...."
He smiles, "Yeah, I'm hungry too."
She frowns, "You hit me with the door, you idiot. I'm saying 'ouchouchouch'."
 
Just think of the work to get an act together.

OK Dave you have one joke..work on the delivery and produce another ten for this weeks show...and star working on some for next week☺

But you have done well.

Alex
 
A man and a woman walk into a restaurant. She mutters, "chowchowchow...."
He smiles, "Yeah, I'm hungry too."
She frowns, "You hit me with the door, you jerk!" and punches him in the shoulder.
He says "ouchouchouch..."
 
Writing a traditional joke is harder than it seems. It's a good idea to use some ambiguous word-play, as you have done. But that alone is not enough.

Consider this arbitrary example:

A ham sandwich walks into a bar.
The bartender says, "Sorry we don't serve food here."

The word-play about "serving food" is good, but perhaps not enough to make it really funny. But it helps that the ham sandwich is walking around, like a person! (And being treated as such.)
 
Gawdzilla Sama said:
Three Irishmen walk out of a bar.
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Two Irishmen walk out of a bar, severely inebriated.

One looks up and calls his mate, "hey, buddeeee, is that the sun up there?"
His mate come over, looks up and responds, "naaaaaahhh, that's the moon up there".
First drunk, "noono... that's the sun up there".
Second drunk, "you crazeee, that's the moon up there".

A third guy comes out of the bar, drunker than both.

The first drunk calls him over; "hey buddeee, my friend and I are having a little disagreement, I say it's the moon up there and he says it's the sun up there, now which is it, huh" ???

The third guy staggers over, looks up and says, "How the heck should I know, I don't live around here".....o_O
 
Heres an original by me from over 60 years ago:::

What did the nail say to the hammer.???

Answr:::

You drive me crazy.!!!
 
DaveC426913 said:
Reminds me of that girl's T-shirt with upside down text on the back, saying:

Don't pull on my ears - I know what I'm doing.
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You should know what precedes
"All the time she kept tapping my head and pulling my ears"

:)
 
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