08-07-12, 04:37 AM #1
What makes a good speech? Curiosity Landing
Here is the speech from Charles Bolden, yesterday, announcing the commencement of one of the most momentous experiments in modern science.
“Today, the wheels of Curiosity have begun to blaze the trail for human footprints on Mars. Curiosity, the most sophisticated rover ever built, is now on the surface of the Red Planet, where it will seek to answer age-old questions about whether life ever existed on Mars — or if the planet can sustain life in the future,” said NASA Administrator Charles Bolden. “This is an amazing achievement, made possible by a team of scientists and engineers from around the world and led by the extraordinary men and women of NASA and our Jet Propulsion Laboratory. President Obama has laid out a bold vision for sending humans to Mars in the mid-2030′s, and today’s landing marks a significant step toward achieving this goal.”
Take the first sentence "Today, the wheels of Curiosity have begun to blaze the trail for human footprints on Mars."
OK He's a scientist, not a playwright, but it made me cringe.
Can sciforummers do better?
Last edited by Captain Kremmen; 08-07-12 at 05:17 AM.
08-07-12, 05:28 AM #2
A figure of speech in which a part is made to represent the whole or vice versa, as in Cleveland won by six runs
met·a·phor [met-uh-fawr, -fer] Show IPA
a figure of speech in which a term or phrase is applied to something to which it is not literally applicable in order to suggest a resemblance, as in “A mighty fortress is our God.” Compare mixed metaphor, simile ( def. 1 ) .
something used, or regarded as being used, to represent something else; emblem; symbol.
the use in the same expression of two or more metaphors that are incongruous or illogical when combined, as in “The president will put the ship of state on its feet.”
Bolden used two Synecdoches in one sentence
"Today, the wheels of Curiosity have begun to blaze the trail for human footprints on Mars."
Is a mixed synecdoche ( a term I have just invented) as bad as a mixed metaphor?
Not quite as bad, I think.
The famous Apollo 11 sentence:
That's one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind"
had two synecdoches, but they were both about the distance a person can reach, so not a mixed synecdoche.
Additionally, in the middle, there is a metaphor, "Blazing a Trail"
Blazing a trail is an unusual phrase, because it uses two definitions for a word and combines them.
Here is an explanation for its dual origins.
When soldiers 'blaze away' with their weapons the blaze refers to the fire and smoke. This has been used since the late 18th century, as here from the Battle of Brooklyn, 1776:
"We bid them stand and blazed away like brave boys."
The meaning we now give to 'blaze a trail' - of someone forging ahead and clearing a path for others, would tend to lead towards imagining blaze to mean burn, in the same way. Another allusion might be to someone charging ahead with such vigour that they leave a smoldering trail in their wake.
Those aren't the thoughts in the mind of those that coined this phrase though. A blaze is a notch or mark, like the blaze marks seen on horses' faces. So, 'to blaze a trail' was to mark it out by notching trees so that others could follow. Trees are also often marked this way to single them out for felling.
I think that a Blaze is also used to describe a distinctively different coloured stripe on an animals chest or especially a horses forehead.
A sentence made out of two synecdoches and a metaphor. Let's call it a Boldenism.
Here's my Boldenism:
The grey beard was keeping his eye on the basketball team because they were painting the town red.
The young shaver was speaking in a strange tongue, so we had to put on our thinking caps.
A Super-Boldenism would be two metaphors and two synecdoches in the same sentence.
Probably never before uttered by mankind.
I leave it to you.
Last edited by Captain Kremmen; 08-07-12 at 09:36 AM.
08-09-12, 12:53 PM #3
The two synecdoches are closely related: using its characteristic means of movement to represent the entire thing/being that moves.Additionally, in the middle, there is a metaphor, "Blazing a Trail"Here's my Boldenism: The grey beard was keeping his eye on the basketball team because they were painting the town red.The young shaver was speaking in a strange tongue, so we had to put on our thinking caps.
08-09-12, 12:55 PM #4
Does anyone really believe humans will go to Mars in 2030's? Aside all the beautiful speech and innuendo...maybe his language hides the true emotions of hope that it will happen, rather than certainty that it seems to portray.
08-09-12, 02:22 PM #5
The wheels are deformable, but they are wheels.
Bolden could write a novel. Dan Brown did.
Young shaver. Perhaps it's just used in England.
A boy showing the first growths of facial hair.
The term “shaver” was used to mean a man (or chap or fellow) as long ago as the late 16th century. The phrase “old shaver” (old man) was recorded in the 1590s, and “young shaver” (a youth) occurred as early as 1630, according to several slang dictionaries I consulted. I’m told this was a reference to the male tendency to shave facial hair.
According to the lexicographer Eric Partridge, the term “shaveling” meant a youth because of “the infrequency of his need to shave.” In modern usage, a “shaver” means a child, and is often preceded by “young” or “little.”
Humour. Maybe you are not the best judge of that.
Last edited by Captain Kremmen; 08-10-12 at 03:04 AM.
08-09-12, 04:58 PM #6
Why is NASA trying to learn about Mars today , just for the fun of it or rather is NASA trying to see what will happen if humans go there and what they will encounter so they will be able to design better things for the humans who travel there.
08-09-12, 05:03 PM #7
08-09-12, 05:22 PM #8not enough has been invested into design of human vehicles.
I'd like to see other countries participating in the trip to Mars as well and do hope to see more input from other nations soon so that this trip will be for the whole of humanity not just America going it alone.
08-09-12, 05:26 PM #9
08-09-12, 05:32 PM #10
It would be good if the robot craft could send samples back to the earth once it has finished looking round.
A few pounds of material would pay for the mission.
It has energy in the form of a nuclear reactor.
It needs a propellant.
08-10-12, 08:37 AM #11
Why are we so PUSHY to send humans out into space when they can be exposed to radiation that will kill them before they can return to Earth along with many other perils of space travel like micrometeors or broken equipment that has no spare parts to fix it? What is wrong with robots doing humans work and if samples are needed, which I don't know why we would need them since analysis can be done there with robots, we need to have samples sent back here?
It costs 100 to 1000 times more for humans to space travel as compared to robotic spacecraft.
08-10-12, 12:14 PM #12
08-11-12, 06:23 AM #13
Look at how many of these probes have disappeared.
There was a grim joke at one time that Martians were shooting them down.
Keep with the robots until the technology is safe.
As regards funding.
Nasa have hundreds of pounds of Moon Rock in their vaults.
A material which is virtually priceless, given that they have the only supply.
Why don't they sell some?
08-11-12, 09:47 AM #14
08-11-12, 01:27 PM #15
Nasa could photograph each rock down to microscopic level, and post it on their website with a price tag.
Say $2Million for a pea sized chunk.
Try forging that.
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