the silent killer guy is following a woman home in an empty surburbian street at midnight. a black alley cat starts to meow but befor it can finnish the silent killer guy pulls out his deadly deadly ninja sword and chops off its head! kitten blood sprays everywhere with out making a sound but the woman thinks she hears something. she turns around to look and the silent killer is standing right in the middle of a street, but he is trained in the art of standing-silently-in-the-steet-at-midnight-without-being-seen so the woman still doesn't know she being followed. too bad for her! she continues to walk home feeling safe, even though she is not. as she walks up to her house she pulls out her keys. they jingle in the midnight air. the silent killer takes this opportunity to make his move! he runs up behind the woman swinging his sword right at her head. at that same moment Mr. miyagi jumps out from behind the bushes and does a jump-while-spinning-and-kicking move and kicks the killers face through the back of his head! no one ever tried to mess with daniel sons mom again!
thanks for that oscar. can anyone else help... the more ideas the better. i especially need to work on building tension. if someone cant help me then can they at least give me an idea of how to build tension when she is being followed? like what points or events can i describe? and NO swords and head chopping please...wtf???
kill her with a gun and keep the killing simple. the main thing is the building up of tension ive already written all the story up until the point where the assaisin has looked at a pic of a woman and is know going to find her when she is going home alone at night.
