what you need to do is stay with YOUR creation.......stimulTE YOUR owN JUICES BY being in the place most artists fear--le blank canvas......so. you must enter your charceters....just BE them, and see what they do and what works
Okay, how's this... He punched her in the face for fun, then as doubled over in pain, and to stop the cunt screaming, he knocked her out cold with an elbow to the neck. The cunt woke up in an industrial section with a splitting headache, naked, gagged but strangely aroused, knowing from his eyes she's about to get herself raped. He looked down at her in the car park, her legs splayed and now dripping juices. He pulled out a machete and slit the cunts throat. He then proceeded to rape her, his excitement building as the blood gushes from the bitches throat. He manages to fill her gash with his liquid protein before she goes cold. The end. What do you think? I submitted something similar 5 years back to a Publishers specialising in romance novels, but as they haven't replied yet, I thought I'd let you have first refusal. My terms are 10% of the sales, non-negotiable. Jaybee.
How bout some one following the assasin, following the woman??? or The woman already knows hes following him and shes leading him into some sort of trap. or the woman hes following turns out to be a man or if you reall wanna go wild then she turns out to be a black widow spider
wtf everybody?? i mean kill her with a gun and keep the killing simple. the main thing is the building up of tension ive already written all the story up until the point where the assaisin has looked at a pic of a woman and is know going to find her when she is going home alone at night.
Do you expect serious answers? Really, you should try yourself... It will never get good unless the author writes it all.. You can't just take different pieces from different people and put it togheter. It won't work. And it will probably be very noticeable too.
Well, I can only hope that before the book is finally published, you'll have learned how to spell "assaisin" ...especially if the word is part of the main title of the novel. Please Register or Log in to view the hidden image! Baron Max
what a nerd, i just typed fast and made an error... u actually noticed that u gay boy Please Register or Log in to view the hidden image!
We really can't write it for you. I'd have all sorts of questions to ask. Why does he pick that picture? What in his history makes him want her? How does he go about finding her? What form of assassination will he chose? Why? torture - disembowlment, cut of body parts, branding, electrocution, the rack, slow, fast, gun, hanging, injection of poision, slow drowning, blood art mutilation on the body I would have to disagree with Victor E in his remark simply because there is no new story line under the sun. They have all been written. What makes a good novel is that you take the common universal themes and tell it in an uncommon way. Every story ever written will have pieces parts of other person's ideas or influence in the writing of the story simply because a good writer is well read in his particular genera. by the way Jaybee... I'd have the assassin relish licking, lappping, and drinking that still warm protein and blood mixture. Tsk, tsk, tsk, you are slipping up there.
