gurglingmonkey
07-22-05, 02:55 AM
Just wanted to see what you folks thought of this story I've been writing. It's fairly absurd, and I, for one, think it's funny sometimes. It's on a site in My Space... that whole free MSN blog thing.
Chamrajnagar: A Tale of Sebastien and the Neanderthal (http://spaces.msn.com/members/admitdenseunexpectedly/)
I'm still working on it, of course, it'll probably never end. Feedback is good.
-Gurglingmonkey
I just read the first line. Cool. I don't think anyone ever wrote a stroy about a novel about Neandrethal man. (I'm not talking about 'Ice Age').
Fraggle Rocker
07-23-05, 09:52 PM
I just read the first line. Cool. I don't think anyone ever wrote a stroy about a novel about Neandrethal man. (I'm not talking about 'Ice Age').Jean Auel. "Clan of the Cave Bear." The entire first book in the Earth's Children series was about Neanderthals because Ayla, the protagonist, had not yet found a community of Homo sapiens like herself.
But her book wasn't humorous like yours. Nice job. ^_^
geistkiesel
07-24-05, 05:02 PM
Just wanted to see what you folks thought of this story I've been writing. It's fairly absurd, and I, for one, think it's funny sometimes. It's on a site in My Space... that whole free MSN blog thing.
Chamrajnagar: A Tale of Sebastien and the Neanderthal (http://spaces.msn.com/members/admitdenseunexpectedly/)
I'm still working on it, of course, it'll probably never end. Feedback is good.
-Gurglingmonkey
I am just too sensitive to read thje entire story, but if yoy added some prohibited sex, for example, it might 'stimulate' the readership. If some end up screaming at you? well as long as they are using your name, spelled correctly and all, you can't lose.Just remember something socially prohibited. For instance, if two of your characters get married in West Virginia, for instance, and then move to California and get a divorce, have a chapter or two wrapped around the question of: after the divorce are they still brother and sister?
Geistkiesel :cool:
Lesbians.
It needs more lesbians.
gurglingmonkey
07-24-05, 09:15 PM
I forgot the lesbians?!?! Goddamit, that happens every time.
Anways I don't care about the story much anymore, because
ADD got the better of me,
And I moved on. I need to return to my roots of spouting pure nonsense.
A cloud clacked on several severed nerfballs retaining no water and exhibiting three clowns, while orbiting two other.... lesbians.
Gurglo