I'm writing a book, it's complete fiction, but it's the greatest insight into my mind I can offer. Check it out if you would like. I would really appreciate feedback. Oh, and it's the first true thing I've ever started writing.

www.geocities.com/bmb012/LookersPredator.doc

Bad URL.
Try again.

http://www.geocities.com/bmb012//yourscrewed.html

that was amusing.

hmmm... so yeah. All I found was a typical geocities page. Geocities is the bane of my existance.

http://www.geocities.com/bmb012/LookersPredator.doc

ah, okay, I remember now, right click and do a save target as, that will work

and yeah, I just mirrored it with my really old site, so there's lots of really goofy stuff on there from years back

Originally posted by DrNeroCF
http://www.geocities.com/bmb012/LookersPredator.doc

The http:// doesn't matter.
The URL is wrong.

I found it.

Try this one:
http://www.geocities.com/bmb012//LookersPredator.doc

Note the TWO forward slashes before the document name.

I am off to read it now.

Do you plan on trying to publish this?
Any attempts so far?
Anything published so far?
Have an agent yet?
How old are you?

its not even finished yet, I'm only 18, and maybe when I'm done with it, I really would just like some feedback, and the right click works for me. Thanks for making it easier though

(if neither work, however, save target as works fine for me, I've heard of this happeneing before)

oh, I know why it worked for you, if you type it in the address line or copy it to there, it will work

I think it's interesting, and you have a readable writing style. Meaning I can see people paying for this book. Teenagers and the like. But you need a better title.

title came to me in a dream, that's what everything is based on, thanks though, I'll consider that as it goes on

i really like ky. i think he sounds really sexcellent. nova is awesome also ;)

This story is deep and imaginative! It deff gives u something to sit back and think about. One thing is missing though. It needs a sexxy pic of the author! lol Mowww! ;-)

awsome. i wish i could write.
it was kinda unnorganized but seeing as im shit i have no write to comment on that.

nova needs to be in the book more. shes sexy. have her bite some1.

the only part that was really confusing was the part where thet all meat w/ nova intraduction. the layout of that part needs to be fixed. all the thoughts are jumbled.


"maybe Jake saw the blood through the sleeves and guessed that he was one of those freaks who cut just because…"
hehehe. carefull bout that. manny cutters take calling it freakish as verry insulting. but i found it rather funny.

doubleposting is good for post count:D

thanks for the advice, and yes, there will be a lot more of nova and biting, tee hee, I think I'll work on that right now...

Originally posted by cthulhus slave
the only part that was really confusing was the part where thet all meat w/ nova

:D Unfortunate misspelling of meet. :D

Okay, I went back and fixed a lot of what slave was taking about, I think, check it out and tell me what you think. The thing is, when I started, this was the first thing I've ever written longer than about 2 pages that's made sense, so as I went on I got better at it, and went back and changed a lot. That sepcific part I went back to and changed a lot and forgot to make it flow. I think it's better now. Slave, tell me what you think.