Deathless

Kill me!

Just Kill me!

Something strange is coming 'round

I just lay here on the ground

Screaming inside from all the pain

Has all this torment just been in vein

A sick fucking joke someone is playing

From far above contralling my life

Making me suffer through all this shit

Not being able to die, not being able to live

Trying to see through clouds of misery
Needing to breath, but choking on dirt
Struggling to rise, just to be struck down again
Unable to fight, unable to stand
Wanna be with my friends like before
I want it to be over
Please kill me

Made a mistake

Took the wrong path

Thought it lead to paradise, it just lead to purgatory

Wandering blindly through the dark

Fall face first into the blood

Surrounded by death, surrounded by life

Can't cross the line either way

Haunted by the past

Burdended by the furture

Disturbing images play over and over in my head

Why won't it stop, even for a moment.......anything

Endless suffering

Eternal torture

Trying to forget, but always remembering

Striving to be forgiven

Still forever damned to stay

It happened so long ago

And the end is no where in sight

Trying to see through clouds of misery
Needing to breath, but choking on dirt
Struggling to rise, just to be struck down again
Unable to fight, unable to stand
Wanna be with my friends like before
I want it to be over
Please kill me

Trying to feel

Consumed by pain

Blaming me for what was done

Gun in hand

Not wanting to live

Needing to die

Friends have all gone

Never to return

Cock it against my head

Didn't want it

No one will help

Waiting to wake-up

To start anew

To be reborn

Lost all hope

Not going to leave

No relief

Sqeeze a little

Can't even do it quick

No where to go

Nothing to do

Nothing left

Nothing to lose

Everything to regret

I can't go on

Need to be set free

It has to end now

Just do it!
Kill me fucker!
Do it!..................BANG!.............Damn.


S.G.

Another brilliant post from a brilliant poster.

Xev:

Thank you.
:)

Very good, I like poetry and you wrote it brillantly. I write too. Instead of many others that rhyme too much or have no certain stance in it. You write what you feel...although I hope you don't really feel like killing yourself or any of that such. :eek:

Keep up the good work. :cool:

I like that, Increan.

:cool:, man.

I'm glad everyone seems to like it.

Dark Master:

It's not about suicide.

Originally posted by Increan
It's not about suicide. [/B]

Juz makin sure :bugeye:

It's about eternal life.

....After suicide?? :bugeye:

Originally posted by Firefly
....After suicide?? :bugeye:

No, the person is sick of being alive and tries to commit suicide, but it fails, because he cannot die and he hates it.

I could kinda see it being interpreted as a "lost spirit" or something drifting around after the body has died, hence at the end, the "spirit" wants some one else to kill them. But it obviously doesn't work, as they're no longer in their body. Though that's quite a spiritual interpretation.

This actually isn't the original version of the poem, it was originally about suicideand ending human suffering, but thats my interpretation. I really like hearing other peoples.