Deathless Kill me! Just Kill me! Something strange is coming 'round I just lay here on the ground Screaming inside from all the pain Has all this torment just been in vein A sick fucking joke someone is playing From far above contralling my life Making me suffer through all this shit Not being able to die, not being able to live Trying to see through clouds of misery Needing to breath, but choking on dirt Struggling to rise, just to be struck down again Unable to fight, unable to stand Wanna be with my friends like before I want it to be over Please kill me Made a mistake Took the wrong path Thought it lead to paradise, it just lead to purgatory Wandering blindly through the dark Fall face first into the blood Surrounded by death, surrounded by life Can't cross the line either way Haunted by the past Burdended by the furture Disturbing images play over and over in my head Why won't it stop, even for a moment.......anything Endless suffering Eternal torture Trying to forget, but always remembering Striving to be forgiven Still forever damned to stay It happened so long ago And the end is no where in sight Trying to see through clouds of misery Needing to breath, but choking on dirt Struggling to rise, just to be struck down again Unable to fight, unable to stand Wanna be with my friends like before I want it to be over Please kill me Trying to feel Consumed by pain Blaming me for what was done Gun in hand Not wanting to live Needing to die Friends have all gone Never to return Cock it against my head Didn't want it No one will help Waiting to wake-up To start anew To be reborn Lost all hope Not going to leave No relief Sqeeze a little Can't even do it quick No where to go Nothing to do Nothing left Nothing to lose Everything to regret I can't go on Need to be set free It has to end now Just do it! Kill me fucker! Do it!..................BANG!.............Damn. S.G.
Very good, I like poetry and you wrote it brillantly. I write too. Instead of many others that rhyme too much or have no certain stance in it. You write what you feel...although I hope you don't really feel like killing yourself or any of that such. Please Register or Log in to view the hidden image! Keep up the good work. Please Register or Log in to view the hidden image!
No, the person is sick of being alive and tries to commit suicide, but it fails, because he cannot die and he hates it.
I could kinda see it being interpreted as a "lost spirit" or something drifting around after the body has died, hence at the end, the "spirit" wants some one else to kill them. But it obviously doesn't work, as they're no longer in their body. Though that's quite a spiritual interpretation.
This actually isn't the original version of the poem, it was originally about suicideand ending human suffering, but thats my interpretation. I really like hearing other peoples.
