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Mostly Harmless
02-13-03, 02:28 AM
the world is run the way it is because thats just is the way it is.
the way it is is the way it went
and how it went and why it went.
But less so why it went then what went wrong with us that meant
that we were spent of our goodsense, and left with shell and dust and smelt.
and so we said Hail ...Lament!
save us from us and all we lent,
we lost our selves in our own pretence
and so it fell, mah white picket fence

it fell it fell mah white picket fence.
And as it fell the knell was swell
and joyous of its own sharp hell.
And as it fell we heard it tell
to us to me to tell its tale
how famous were we to live that tale
to tell o' that great hell, to tell?

So let that hell be told to sell
and let us add a bit of sell
to it and package that shit real well,
when the storys got its shit in gear,
that fellow ego comes back to hear,
the story of its past ;
Damn shit that was a blast!

Lets do it again, my fellow man
lets kick the shit ou' the lot and plan
our shining light our divinity
in the story of i, my head and me

A Canadian
02-14-03, 09:16 PM
i hate reading poems, but i enjoy writing them :D

everneo
02-15-03, 11:38 AM
i read reviews only..:p

Mostly Harmless
02-18-03, 07:04 AM
Aww, thats not cool, the least you can do after all my labours is to give me a critique???

at least tell me if you get it????

spuriousmonkey
02-18-03, 07:20 AM
Originally posted by Mostly Harmless
2why the world is the way it is...

I don't get the 2 in front of why, and this makes me too afraid to continue

everneo
02-18-03, 07:35 AM
Originally posted by Mostly Harmless
Aww, thats not cool, the least you can do after all my labours is to give me a critique???

at least tell me if you get it????

try some haiku. it is short and effective. most of all none will comment without reading...like me ! :)

Fraggle Rocker
02-18-03, 08:27 PM
Looks like a great lyric. Get somebody to set it to music. After all, that's the only medium for poetry to get noticed these days anyway!

Mostly Harmless
02-19-03, 06:31 AM
Hey Rocker, if you know any good tunes for it, please let me know. i'll mention you in my dedications!!!

spuriousmonkey, the 2 is there cause this Why the world is.... was the title for another thread and i didnt think (after writing the poem) that it added much to thier serious considerations, but didnt want to (completely) highjack the title.

as for trying haiku, if i knew what it was i surely would. is it like the New Zealand hakka??? to scare off bad spirits? or just bad lymerics?
:bugeye:

everneo
02-19-03, 08:27 AM
Harmless just for intro. all the best. link : http://haikuhut.com/